|Apr. 6th, 2009 12:49 pm|
I have been writing a story for a while now. Read what is below and tell me what you think. (This is not all of it there is a lot more)
It was a warm, sunny Friday afternoon. It was a perfect day to go for a jog. I went to my room and changed into something more comfortable. I went outside and went to my friend Peyton’s house. I knocked on her front door. Her mom answered the door.
“Hi, is Peyton home?” I asked.
“Yeah, she is in her room,” She said, letting me in.
I walked inside and down the hall. I knocked on Peyton’s bedroom door.
“Yeah, come in,” she said.
I opened the door and went in.
“Hey girl, what have you been up to today?” I asked her.
“I’ve done nothing really, just sitting around, listening to music. What about you?” She said.
“Nothing really, I was just about to go for a jog and was wondering if you wanted to go,” I told her.
“Umm… Sure let me change into something else and tell my mom,” She told me.
When she was finished changing, she put her hair up. She grabbed her IPod and cell phone. She told her mom that she was going jogging with me and walked outside. We jogged passed my house and Peyton asked, “Who moved in next door to you?”
“Umm… This guy named Dylan and his family. They moved in about a month ago,” I told her.
“So have you introduced yourself yet?” She asked.
“Yeah,” I answered.
Then she saw Dylan and asked, “Who is that really cuter guy over there?”
“Oh that’s Dylan,” I told her.
We put one earpiece in our ear, so we could listen to the music but still hear each other. When we were finished jogging, we went to my house. Just before we went in, Dylan said, “Hey Natasha,” while walking towards us.
“Hey Dylan, What’s up?” I asked.
“Nothing much,” He responded.
“Umm… Dylan this is Peyton and Peyton this is Dylan,” I said.
“Hi Dylan, it’s nice to meet you,” Peyton said.
“It’s nice to meet you too Peyton,” Dylan said.
“Well we got to go, see you later,” I said.
Peyton and I walked inside my house and went to my room.
“Girl I saw you flirting with him, but I can’t blame you he was hot,” She told me.
“Oh My Gosh, Peyton, I was not flirting with him. Did you forget that I’m still with Johnny?” I stated.
“Girl you still with him? You could do so much better than him,” She told me.
“Yeah I am still with him. What do you mean I could do so much better?” I told her.
“I am just saying you deserve better than him. To me he doesn’t treat you the way you should be treated,” Peyton told me.
“Okay let’s change the subject. What are you doing today?” I asked her.
“I don’t know, probably nothing why?” she asked.
“Because I wanted to know if you wanted to hang out,” I told her.
“Yeah let’s hang out. Do you want to go to the mall?” She asked.
“Sure maybe we can go to the movies too. Just let me take a shower,” I told her.
“Okay, I also need to take a shower, so I will come back afterwards,” she told me.
“Okay, see you then,” I said.
Peyton left and I got into the shower. When I got out the shower, I wrapped a towel around me and went to my closet. I picked out a teal tube top and a pair of blue jeans. I put my clothes on and went to my mirror and put my make-up on. I was headed to my bathroom to fix my hair when the doorbell rung. I headed downstairs and answered the door. It was Peyton.
“Hey girl, come in. So what do you want to do?” I asked her.
“We did talk about going to the mall and then to the movies. So what movies are playing?” Peyton stated.
“Hmm… Let me see what movies are playing,” I said sitting down at the computer.
I type in google.com and then typed in movies that are playing.
“Okay here is the list of movies that are playing: The Strangers, Prom Night, The Happening, and Iron Man,” I told her.
“I want to see Prom Night or The Strangers,” She responded.
“Let’s go see The Strangers,” I told Peyton.
“Okay, let’s go to the mall for a couple of hours and then around 6:30 pm, 7 pm, we will go to the movies,” She told me.
“Is it okay if Dylan comes with us?” I asked Peyton.
“Yeah. Well let me go home and get my car,” Peyton responded.
“Okay, I will go over and get him,” I told her.
“Okay it might be twenty or thirty minutes until I come back because I have things to do,” She told me as she left.
I put my flip flops on and went next door to Dylan’s house. I knocked on the door and his mom answered the door.
“Hello, may I help you?” She asked.
“Umm… is Dylan home?” I asked.
“Yes he is, come in, let me go get him,” She responded.
I walked in and Dylan came in and said, “Hey what’s up?”
“Nothing much, I was wondering do you want to go to the mall and then to the movies with Peyton and me?” I asked him.
“Umm… hold on let me go see,” He said.
I waited for him to come back, when he came back he told me, “Yeah I can go, when y’all plan on going?” He asked.
“In about twenty or thirty minutes,” I told him.
“Okay, Do you mind if I hand out with you till then?” He asked.
“No I don’t mind,” I responded.
“Okay, let me go get my keys,” He told me.
We walked back to my house. While waiting for Peyton to come I told Dylan, “Hey I will be right back; I got to find my purse, cell phone and keys,”
“Do you want me to help you find anything?” He asked.
“Sure if you want to. You can look in my lounge room,” I told him.
“Okay, what does your cell phone look like?” He asked.
“It is a teal color but it has a cover on it. The cover is black that is kind of transparent and it has white skulls on it. Oh yeah it is an LG Scoop phone and if you do not see it then you can hang out in there or wait in the living room,” I told Dylan.
I found my keys in my room, so I went downstairs to the room Dylan was in and said, “I found my keys.”
“Umm… Is this your purse?” He asked while holding it up.
“Yes it is thank you so much now I just go to find my cell phone,” I told him.
He helped me look for my cell and the next thing I know Dylan said, “I found your phone.”
I turned around and he was holding it. I walked over to him and gave him a hug.
“Thank you so much, okay lets go see if Peyton is ready,” I told him while turning the ringer up on my phone.
I put my cell phone in my purse. We walked outside right when Peyton pulled up. We got in Peyton’s car. My phone began to ring. I took it out of my purse, looked at it and it was Johnny.
I answered, “Hey there,”
“Hey baby, I tried to call you earlier,” He said.
“Oh, I just found my phone. Well I can’t talk right now because I am about to leave,” I told him.
“Where are you going?” He asked.
“I am going to the mall and then to the movies with two friends. Well I got to go, bye,” I said then hanging up.
When we arrived at the mall, we went to Aeropostal first. Peyton bought a halter top. I bought three tops, two skirts, a sundress, a bra, a bikini and a pair of sunglasses for $109. We went to the food court. Peyton got a pizza, fries and a large soda. Dylan didn’t get anything, except a soda. I got pasta, rice, sesame chicken and a large soda. Peyton and I shared our food with Dylan.
After we ate we went to American Eagle. Dylan bought two shirts and I bought a shirt. We went into Journeys (a shoe store) I bought a pair of Circa skater shoes. They are black and have skulls on them. The last store we went to was Victoria Secret. Before we went in I told Dylan, “Hey, you don’t have to go in if you don’t want to,”
“Its okay I will come in,” He said.
I bought a matching bra and underwear for $45 each. After we left the mall we went to the movies. The movie started at 6:50pm and was over at 8:50pm. On the ride home we were talking about the movie and then I get a text message from Johnny saying,” Hey baby, I miss you,”
Peyton dropped Dylan and me off. I went inside my house and locked the door. I went upstairs and took a shower. By the time I got dressed it was 9:40pm. I called Peyton but she didn’t answer. My phone begins to ring and it was Johnny.
“Hello,” I said answering the phone.
“Hey babe, how was the movie?” He asked.
“It was good,” I responded.
“I was wondering, can I come over tomorrow?” He asked.
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